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SlideSwitched Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
thanks for the llama!
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Substrain-Seven Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Thank you for the fave.~
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candle-earth Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm tagging you even though you're gone fav.me/d7s83d9
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The-Gilded-Knight Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2014  New member Hobbyist Digital Artist
I thank you for the watch, it means a lot!
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candle-earth Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
heyy I'm here to give you some feedback about Thais ^^
I apologize in advance for the long text.. my critiques are always way too long :iconheaddeskplz:


About the images
first impression :star::star::star::star::star-half:
My first impression is that you're a really good visual artist. Your drawings are always nicely finished and they look like they required a lot of effort to be created, which makes your artworks generally pleasing to the eyes.

vision :star::star::star::star::star:
you seem to know what message you want to bring across with your art and do so successfully. Even the first image of Thais, despite having no background fav.me/d7jrfzd shows that Thais is someone who's got it made, is confident and that she doesn't let people mess with her :nod:

technique :star::star::star::star::star-half:
You seem to have a very firm grip of the cartoon style you wish to achieve. I get the impression you know how to draw realistically, as the anatomy in your drawings is really good, the colouring/lighting/shading is superb; the colours always blend well together, the tones in your drawings also contrast well - I'm pretty sure if I put your drawings in greyscale, they'd still look awesome.

Based on fav.me/d7lcbho you also seem to know very well how perspective works. if you'd like to further your skills, I'd say experiment more with the lineart styles - as now they seem very flat. idk how to explain that really, but I think if you see these linearts you'll get what I mean :D [link] [linkylink] [clickiteeclick] [linkclick]. I have to say though in some of your drawings I noticed you also coloured/shaded the lineart, which also looks really nice :meow:

composition :star::star::star::star::star:
What can I say, you know how to set up your images :D the composition of your images immediately draws the eye to the subjects of interest, and everything's got space to breathe / isn't cut off weird. I did notice most of your images are rather static/straightforward, so perhaps you could try more dynamic angles like these [link] [link2] [link3], but I think you won't have too much trouble experimenting with different angles :P


about Thais as a character
first impression: :star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty:
my first impression of Thais is that I've seen this character many times before. The badass flawless leader woman. Becoming corrupt for that matter isn't a flaw, it's merely admitting she's not as pure as society wants her to be, and Thais seems fully in control of having gone corrupt as well, so she wasn't forced into this position. She appears fully in control of her life. To me, she comes off as a little boring because of this.

Of course, I don't know her story all that well (I've read the description, but that doesn't do me much, I need to experience a character's story to come to appreciate characters), but I think she would become much more engaging if we found out what she regrets in life, or what she's ashamed or scared of, and what she wishes to change. If she has no such things as of yet, then surely she's going to do something she's going to regret later? Foreshadowing this in her character description would then do the trick to lure people in to see what's going to go wrong in her story.

then again I also realize that we haven't had any tasks so far in which we had to focus on flaws, so I guess that also lead us into portraying a more positive view of our characters.

originality :star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty:
Thais is relatively original imo. like I said, my first impression is that I've seen her character before, but all the same, I really like that she has no magic powers even though she's in a magic world. this makes me wonder how she gained respect in this world anyway :D surely she must've had some hardships because of this?

A small thing I would change is the pronounciation of her name though.. I see a lot of people giving names to characters with rather illogical ways of pronouncing it, which to me comes off as trying too hard to be different, but fact is that no one is going to pronounce the name in that illogical way, because it simply makes no sense and as such doesn't get remembered that way.. if you want Thais to be pronounced as Tie-EES, I would spell it differently.. maybe Tiyees or so, but in all honesty the pronounciation also doesn't really flow from the tongue, so I would just let it be pronounced as Theys or Tais. or perhaps she has this obsession with her name and wants everyone to pronounce it differently.. that could work too :XD: coz then it makes the reader wonder why she insists on this :D

I do really like her outfits though, as they are unique, yet at the same time not trying too hard to be unique :D for that matter I especially like her formal outfit :0 you know the one with the feathers and stuff. love to see where she wears that :D

consistency :star::star::star::star::star:
idk what to call this, but consistency seems to nail it well enough :XD:
Thais seems consistent in her personality as in, she doesn't have contradicting personality traits for as far as I can tell. She's badass, confident, dominant, and it even shows in her favourite food and drink.. I mean, barbequed dragon meat, that's awesome :XD: usually the dragons do the roasting, but Thais roasts them instead lol.

the fact that she's a crime lord reflects a personality that is attracted to danger and challenge, which is also reflected in the drawing with that Sparkle tiger - she's not scared of such a dangerous animal, in fact, she keeps Sparkle as her pet :0

finally, her outfits match her personality and job - they all reflect feminine dominance. Idk if that makes sense :XD: but like, none of them are cutesy or softy-looking, they all look like she's a leader type of person, while at the same time it's not too manly; she's still a lady. again, idk if that makes sense but yea :XD:


all in all I'd say your character has a lot going for her, and the artworks are simply stunning. I'm looking forward to learning more about Thais ^^

I hope this critique was helpful :P if anything's vague or so, don't hesitate to ask for clarification. I know I can sometimes come off confusing :XD:
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Jazz-Rhythm Featured By Owner Edited Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Holy crap, I wasn't expecting such a detailed critique. I really appreciate this, man - you really went above and beyond for this challenge. I'm gonna try my best to respond to your main points, but forgive me if I end up overlooking some of them ^^;

Well first off, you're not the first to say that I should try to make my stuff more dynamic, so I'm totally in agreement with you there. Admittedly I haven't been working on varying my angles as much as I should be, but I've definitely been working on different lineart styles. I feel like it's really inconsistent since I keep approaching lineart differently, and I've gone back to experimenting with traditional lineart and digital color in some of my recent stuff. Idk though, I'm still trying to figure out a style that I like and can stick to. Thank you for your kind compliments though - it's nice to know which are my strengths and which are my weaknesses from another person's point of view.

As for my character, glad to know she's perceived as a strong leader. My first concepts of her made her out to be a weak sidekick/damsel-in-distress type of character which is...really bland. I don't blame you for thinking she's kinda boring though since I haven't publicly shared that much about her back story yet. One day I'll make a comic about her, but there's still a lot of planning I have to do for her story, so in the meantime I wanted to try and develop her more through OC-Training. I'll try to make her more personable in future challenges so that you can maybe hopefully feel more invested in her 8)

TBH I think her name is pronounced really weird too, and for the longest time I thought it was pronounced "thy-es" (I still pronounce it that way in my head most of the time). It's actually a Greek name though, and the original pronunciation is "tie-ees", so it was just a personal decision of mine to stick to how the name is suppose to be said.

But all in all, thank you so much! This critique definitely provided me with some more insight on my work, and I'm super grateful for the time you took to write all of this. I feel like I really have to step up my game when I get around to writing crits for the people I was assigned, eheh 8D;;
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candle-earth Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
you're welcome, I'm glad my critique was helpful ^^

yea dynamic images are easily forgotten to be made though :D I usually stick with simple, straight forward angles as well :P
about the linearts, I see :D I only looked at the works for OC-training, so I guess I missed most of your previous experimenting!

yea I think it's really coz I just want to see some flaws.. but I forgot, but does OC-training get a task about flaws/dislikes? coz now we got another task focused on what our characters enjoy/like.. 

huh that's weird :XD: Greek people are weird lol/shot
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Marcyfire4 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014
Thanks for the llama.
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Toby512 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2014   Digital Artist
Hi ^^, thanks for the badge.
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HellMagik666 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Thanks for llama~~
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